The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
The figure given above demonstrates how UK citizens travel daily using the automobile, bus, and
train
during the
period
of
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1970 and 2030. It is apparent from the information supplied that the car has the most used all the time that given
period
.
The bus
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usage which is
second
much-used by
the
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commuters declined during the
period
of
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between
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1970 and 2030.
The
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train
usage, meanwhile, slightly climb and occupy the
second
much-used
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vehicle
at
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somewhere in the vicinity of the year
of
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2012. In 1970, approximately 5 million people have traveled by car and
this
rate increased negligibly in the following decade. The bus stands in the middle of the list with about 4 million commuters in 1970.
The
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following years until about 2012, declined continuously and plunged to 3,5 million commuters which
are
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the same rate
with
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train
users. The
train
started to slightly increase until 2000. After a decade,
this
rate didn't infer until 2010.
Furthermore
,
the
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train
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usage will occupy the
second
of the şist by rising steadily during the
period
of
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2010 and 2030.

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