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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organization. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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For some individuals it is common to devote all their
work
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 time to the same
company
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, while other people prefer to make periodic career shifts from one
company
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 to another. In
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 essay, I will overview the features of the both approaches as well as provide with my personal thoughts regarding related career planning issues. On the one hand, employees who
work
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 for the same firm the whole life express the maximum level of loyalty and devotion.
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, in terms of professionalism an employer sees in these people the most valuable, reliable and experienced specialists. The
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 leaders
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 are highly interested in encouraging more and more workers to stay within the
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 as long as possible by providing additional bonuses and rewards. At the same time the employees themselves feel more comfortable and stable working at the same place with the same colleagues.
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, for individuals who try to realize their potential and seek career opportunities may be more attractive to move periodically through different companies. It allows them not only to look for better roles and positions beyond the current employer but
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 to expand
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the boundaries
 for changing industry, direction or even region for better perspectives if needed.
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, the
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 change always helps people to put themselves out of the comfort zone, which in turn have an impact on their personal and professional development. While the benefits of working
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longer
 for the same
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 are
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obvious, especially
 in conditions of constantly changing environment, I strongly believe that the most efficient way for a person who want to develop and grow is to always look possibilities for
promotion
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promoting
 not only inside the
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 but
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 outside
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of
 the
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 market as a whole and use these possibilities immediately. Only
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 approach could reach the maximum goals and bring spectacular success.

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