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Human activity has had a negative impact on planet and animal around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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Some people argue that environmental problems cannot be solved, while others say there are still chances to change it. I do believe that, humanity can bring clear improvement in
this
 matter. Today, environmental issues have become an important topic of discussions. There are true evidences that our planet becoming more and more polluted every single day and most of the people say that
this
 situation is hopeless. Since the problems like bad air conditions, plastic waste pollution, global warming and others convicted people that
this
 cannot be solved or either there is no turning back way and that the problem is so great that there are no chance to fix it. But in the other hand, In my opinion, I still believe that
this
 problem can be tackled. Obviously, there are a lot of
thing
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things
 to be working on, because a positive
changes
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change
 does not appear in an instant. But if humanity gives to it enough attention and exact information how to deal with, society will step by step improve environmental conditions. Like popularization of garbage sorting. Government should distribute more money for
ensycling
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insulin
 or thing like alternative energy sources, create large projects for planting thousands of deserted lands with trees.
Also
 countries can support each other in
this
 matter, and of course, politics
plays
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play
 a huge role in it.
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In
 conclusion, I want to say that there are always ways to help to our planet and it is in our power whether we can make life around us better.
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