Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have an significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?

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In the 21st century, the inventions of science and technology like television, social media and video games have a great impact on the intellectual and society development. Some people contend that the electronic media and the violence in game have no negative on the individual

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

, while I disagree with

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contention, because these things have influenced the society’s

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

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with, the television shows which people are

watching in

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watching, in

these days like Reality games and wrestling, and children are more fond of these shows can easily be influenced, try to imitate them which could result in severe injury.

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the computer games which involve fighting and killing opponents,

this

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could

also

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lead to influence in their later life, they can commit crimes which can increase the problem for

government

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the government

to tackle with

these situation

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this situation

these situations

. The solution to

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problem is to divert the attention of the children from these shows and video games to healthy activities. Parents should encourage them to play sports like cricket and football with their friends. Parents

should prohibits

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should prohibit

them to watch

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programs and video games which could have

negative impact

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a negative impact

on their personality.

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government

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the government

should provide adequate sports facilities like building more sports ground, so in

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way the society will be free from

negative trends

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the negative trends

like prostitution and drug abuse. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that it’s a

parents

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parent

as well as government responsibility

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for

development of a

child

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child's

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

and by providing facilities related to sports.

Government

Suggestion

The government

should make laws for the shows which are not appropriate for the society and children.

Tue Jan 28 2020

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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265 words

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proliferation
desensitize
empathetic response
aggressive behavior
formative years
impressionable
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media psychology
mixed results
family environment
genetics
regulatory bodies
rating systems
vulnerable demographics
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