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The best way to learn about other culture is to work in a multinational organization do you agree or Disagree

#culture #work #organization
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nowadays
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Nowadays
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 the multinational companies are available in all over the world
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Albeit, working in the MNC is the good way to learn about
new
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a new culture
new cultures
culture
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 and tradition
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I noteworthy disagree with
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 notion because of various reasons which I will discuss before embarking any conclusion There is no denying the fact that working in an international organization is worthwhile for people to learn other tradition and
culture
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because
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Because
 they
work
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 with other people and learn about not only their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 but
also
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 their language.
Secondly
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,
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,
they can
also
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 explore to other places for their
work
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 and get knowledge about those particular places.
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last
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Last
 but not the least
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,
in the multinational companies rather than only one
culture
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,
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,
their
in or at that place
there
 are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
 of people
work
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 together
,
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,
who belong to other various
back ground
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backgrounds
background
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so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 the masses get
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to meet
plethora
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a plethora
the plethora
 of
culture
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 in the particular place and gain knowledge about it.
Nevertheless
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,
there have been various reasons that it is not necessarily the best way to acquire information about other
culture
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 because not all the people get
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to visit other places it totally depends on the person's position in the company.
Moreover
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,
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,
companies always give a lot of
work
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 stress to the people so they have no enough time to learn about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
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.
Furthermore
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,
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,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 excellent way to learn about other foreign
culture
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,
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,
for instance
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,
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,
in
this
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days
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day
 people visit all over the world for
sake
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the sake
 of getting knowledge about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 tradition
,
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,
they
also
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 like to
sped
pass time in a specific way
spend
 their time with them. To conclude
,
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it is clear from the a for
stated paragraph
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the state paragraph
state paragraph
a state paragraph
stating paragraph
 that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 alone for twirling purpose is the best because people can explore countries sans of any stress.

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