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The best way to learn about other culture is to work in a multinational organization do you agree or Disagree

#culture #work #organization
nowadays
Suggestion
Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
 the multinational companies are available in all over the world
.
Accept space
.
Albeit, working in the MNC is the good way to learn about
new
Suggestion
a new culture
new cultures
culture
 and tradition
.
Accept space
.
I noteworthy disagree with
this
 notion because of various reasons which I will discuss before embarking any conclusion There is no denying the fact that working in an international organization is worthwhile for people to learn other tradition and
culture
.
Accept space
.
because
Suggestion
Because
 they
work
 with other people and learn about not only their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 but
also
 their language.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
they can
also
 explore to other places for their
work
 and get knowledge about those particular places.
last
Suggestion
Last
 but not the least
,
Accept space
,
in the multinational companies rather than only one
culture
,
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,
their
in or at that place
there
 are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
 of people
work
 together
,
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,
who belong to other various
back ground
Suggestion
backgrounds
background
.
Accept space
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 the masses get
opportunity
Suggestion
the opportunity
an opportunity
 to meet
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
the plethora
 of
culture
 in the particular place and gain knowledge about it.
Nevertheless
,
Accept space
,
there have been various reasons that it is not necessarily the best way to acquire information about other
culture
 because not all the people get
opportunity
Suggestion
the opportunity
an opportunity
 to visit other places it totally depends on the person's position in the company.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
companies always give a lot of
work
 stress to the people so they have no enough time to learn about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 excellent way to learn about other foreign
culture
,
Accept space
,
for instance
,
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,
in
this
days
Suggestion
day
 people visit all over the world for
sake
Suggestion
the sake
 of getting knowledge about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 tradition
,
Accept space
,
they
also
 like to
sped
pass time in a specific way
spend
 their time with them. To conclude
,
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,
it is clear from the a for
stated paragraph
Suggestion
the state paragraph
state paragraph
a state paragraph
stating paragraph
 that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 alone for twirling purpose is the best because people can explore countries sans of any stress.

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