You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit.

#visit #friend #canada #event #home #change #dates

Hello my

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Hello, my

friend,

First

of all, I want to say sorry because I can't

visit

Canada. I mean I have an important event at our home. Let me explain why I can't

visit

Canada. My grandfather will come our home

week and we will go to my grandmother's home. I'm really sad that I can't

visit

you. I apologise for that situation my friend. If you are free

month I can

visit

you. We must meet

month. I mean

that is

only suggestion

Suggestion

the only suggestion

because I have a free ticket for going to Canada. We must use the free ticket advantage. See you later.

Tue Jan 28 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

106 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of a bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that tourism promotes the economy while other argue that tourism destroy the environmental. Discuss both views.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers in education system?