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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Society
also
 becomes guilty of taking away someone's
life
 by providing
death
penalty
 as
punishment
to
Suggestion
for
 murderers.
Instead
,
life
 in
prison
 is a better
punishment
 for them and I partially agree with that thought. The essay will discuss if
life
 in
prison
 is better than capital
punishment
 along with my take on it.
To begin
 with,
primary purpose
Suggestion
the primary purpose
a primary purpose
 of
punishment
 should be to make the guilty realize what mistake they have done.
Thus
,
death
Suggestion
the death penalty
penalty
 may or may not always achieve that
purpose whereas
Accept comma addition
purpose, whereas
life
 in
prison
 gives murderer a
chance
 to repent and bring change in themselves.
For instance
, prisons in few countries allow murderers, who show good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, a
chance
 to work and earn during the day while they still continue their
life
 in
prison
. Apart from that, juvenile crimes should be handled separately while taking into account the under-developed minds and
age
Suggestion
the age
 of the children.
Death
Suggestion
The death penalty
penalty
 does not make sense for a child who does not fully understand the difference between right and wrong.
Furthermore
, some murders happen unintentionally in the heat of the moment
such
 as during self-
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
. In
such
 cases
intent
Suggestion
the intent
 of murder should be taken into consideration and
murderer
Suggestion
murderers
the murderer
a murderer
 should be given a
second
chance
 through
life
 in
prison
 to improve on their mistake.
Therefore
,
death
Suggestion
the death penalty
penalty
 cannot be generalized as a
punishment
 for all murderers.
However
, in cases where the murder has been committed
heinously
Suggestion
heinous
 or intentionally, it becomes necessary to set an example through
death
penalty
 to instill fear of law in society and to prevent similar crimes in
future
Suggestion
the future
. To conclude, in my opinion all murderers should not be given capital
punishment
 by default, and rather be given a
chance
 to improve via
life
 in
prison
 as
punishment
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • irreversible
  • deterrence
  • rehabilitation
  • human rights
  • ethical dilemma
  • state-sponsored
  • vindicate
  • incarceration
  • due process
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