The number of days people are absent from work due to stress related illnesses is increasing year on year. However, with developments in technology, life should be easier for many of us than in the past. What then are the main causes of stress in today's society?

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In the actual days, many of difficult things are easier for many of us: the reason of

that is

thanks to developments in technology. It

help

Suggestion

helps

us to spend less

time

doing

something but

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something, but

time

to control a computer that do things. In many aspects of ordinary life, developments in technology have helped people reducing their manually actions and,

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consequence, reducing their

stress

about it. For that reason, in today’s society, people have more leisure

time

. Anyway, there are other causes of

stress

: in my personal opinion, the most important reason for daily’s

stress

is following the deadlines. We

are living

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have been living

have lived

the fastest

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the fast

world since

industrial revolution

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the industrial revolution

: people want everything and want it immediately.

This

is a must for anything.

For example

, we want to travel faster and more often, our online orders must be delivered faster, we pretend have not waiting

time

when we must do something. I do not know why we are evolving in

this

direction or

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direction, or

why we must speeding up everything. Maybe, the

technology’s

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technology

upgrades have a negative aspect: the society

pretend

Suggestion

pretends

from us that, having these upgrades, we must

engage in

make

every action faster. Before the upgrades, we did more fatigue doing things

instead

, after them, we do less fatigue but faster. Indirectly, we have the same

stress but

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stress, but

from different sources: the

second

one is difficult to

found

Suggestion

find

. The only solution for

this

, is come back to appreciate

little thing

Suggestion

little things

the little thing

and special moments, not living just for money or work.

This

is the only way to reduce

stress

and live healthy.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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The number of days people are absent from work due to stress related illnesses is increasing year on year. However, with developments in technology, life should be easier for many of us than in the past. What then are the main causes of stress in today's society?

Include an introduction and conclusion

A company has announced that it is wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your country. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

These days older people who have retired often choose to spend money on them. For example on holiday, rather than save money for their children. Is this a positive or negative development

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.