The number of days people are absent from work due to stress related illnesses is increasing year on year. However, with developments in technology, life should be easier for many of us than in the past. What then are the main causes of stress in today's society?

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In the actual days, many of difficult things are easier for many of us: the reason of
that is
thanks to developments in technology. It
help
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helps
us to spend less
time
doing
something but
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something, but
more
time
to control a computer that do things. In many aspects of ordinary life, developments in technology have helped people reducing their manually actions and,
on
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in
of
consequence, reducing their
stress
about it. For that reason, in today’s society, people have more leisure
time
. Anyway, there are other causes of
stress
: in my personal opinion, the most important reason for daily’s
stress
is following the deadlines. We
are living
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have been living
have lived
in
the fastest
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the fast
world since
industrial revolution
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the industrial revolution
: people want everything and want it immediately.
This
is a must for anything.
For example
, we want to travel faster and more often, our online orders must be delivered faster, we pretend have not waiting
time
when we must do something. I do not know why we are evolving in
this
direction or
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direction, or
why we must speeding up everything. Maybe, the
technology’s
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technology
upgrades have a negative aspect: the society
pretend
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pretends
from us that, having these upgrades, we must
do
engage in
make
every action faster. Before the upgrades, we did more fatigue doing things
instead
, after them, we do less fatigue but faster. Indirectly, we have the same
stress but
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stress, but
from different sources: the
second
one is difficult to
found
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find
. The only solution for
this
, is come back to appreciate
little thing
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little things
the little thing
and special moments, not living just for money or work.
This
is the only way to reduce
stress
and live healthy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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