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What is more important job satisfsction or job security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#job #satisfsction #security
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person
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’s vocation is an integral part of his/her life as on many occasions, an individual’s identity is defined by the kind of
work
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 he/she performs daily. There is an ongoing debate as to
which amongst
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which, amongst
 the following two points
that is
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 the personal
job
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satisfaction
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 or
job
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security
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 should be given higher priority while deciding upon choosing one’s career path. Through the medium of
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 essay, I will discuss both the points and provide my personal opinion in the end. The
first
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 viewpoint talks about
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satisfaction
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, which
also
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 means getting an immense sense of personal
satisfaction
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 and pleasure from the
work
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 assigned.
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 primary school teachers get an amazing amount of personal
satisfaction
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 and a sense of true purpose in their respective lives due practicing the noble profession of teaching even though teaching as a profession does not attract higher salary packages.
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, the proponents of the notion of
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security
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 claim that the primary purpose of any livelihood is to generate and sustain financial
security
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 over the lifetime of a
person
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. They are willing to do a particular task assigned to them even if it is mundane, boring or one of the most disliked activities to be done by anybody.
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, there are numerous government employees who do not like the
work
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 which they are doing at
office
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the office
, but they choose to do it everyday as there is an aspect of
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security
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 involved. In my personal opinion,
Job
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satisfaction
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 is more important than
job
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security
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 as, If a
person
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 is getting
job
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satisfaction
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 out of any particular
job
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 which he/she is doing,
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 that particular
person
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 will be more motivated to do the
work
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 assigned to him and be more productive at
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 and happy in his personal life as compared to a
person
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 who is only chasing stability without actually committing to the
job
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.
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