Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

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Using cars

has been becoming

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has become

increasingly common in recent years.

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Ithink

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I think

that it maintains some obvious harmful consequences, I strongly believe

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that the

advantages of the

car

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can outweigh its advantages. On the one hand, owning cars has a significant influence on the environment. The

first

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reason is that the growth in travelling by

car

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can lead to a rise in pollution, traffic jams, and accidents. More cars are likely to result in

rocketing rate

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a rocketing rate

of pollution.

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, our dependence on cars can lead to decrease in practices,

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as walking and cycling. People may have a higher chance of carrying more potential health

risks like

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risks, like

obesity and heart attack.

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, there are many reasons why people prefer to own cars.

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, it provides people with the freedom of movement. The ease of

transportation which

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transportation, which

car

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brings is significant/prominent than any other form of vehicles.

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, you can go from a destination to another destination and no time is wasted waiting for the bus or train.

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, time and distance are not barriers anymore.

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, personal cars can give comfort while travelling compared to the public transports which are so crowded and disgusting.

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, you can

read

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Read

books, listen to your favourite songs or even play with kids while you are in your own

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car but

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car, but

all seems to be impossible on a public transport.

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, families can go together.

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becomes especially helpful when there are elderly, the disabled or even sick members in the families. In conclusion, having a

car

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can lead to a few obvious problems, but I believe that owning a

car

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is the best choice and the benefits that it brings about can outshine its drawbacks.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

287 words

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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that individuals are born to be leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough excercise? What can be done about this problem?

Many people try to create a balance between their professional life and their personal life. However, very few are able to achieve such a balance. What problems stop people from achieving a work-life balance? How can these problems be overcome?