rich countries should aallow jobs for skilled and knowlegeable employers who are from poor coutries. Do you agree or disagree.

Even after the decades of modernisation I can clearly say with credence, that in most of
the countries, rich
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the rich countries,
has been always rich and poor has been always poor, even after lots of great supports and changes by the government.Which in my opinion
job
is the main cause of it, by
favering
promote over another
favouring
fathering
furthering
wealthy people with better
job
without knowing their skills which
lands
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land
in leaving behind the poor people assuming them as lesser privilege.
Firstly
,
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,
in my opinion
,
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,
I
belief
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believe
believed
that it's important for rich countries to give
job
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jobs
to skilled and knowledgeable
employers
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
from poor countries, cause it may bring large scale of development which they never aspect.
For instance
,
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,
even if rich countries
has
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have
their own skilled and high knowledge
employer but
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employer, but
they are not same as
skilled
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a skilled employer
employer
from poor countries because
this
plural of "this"
these
peoples
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people
are more hard working and loyal towards what they are doing with
perfect goal
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the perfect goal
in their mindset.
As a result
,
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,
it
bring
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brings
better environment and trust within workers.
Secondly
, the way the poor countries think can be very helpful and logic.
For example
, to improve
an
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a
country we have to able to think from both the
aspect
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aspects
of rich and poor
,
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,
therefore
being from poor
countries these
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countries, these
employers know what is the weakness of the country and how to tackle the hardest problems due to their experience.
Lastly
,
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,
likewise
in
ladhak
being
an
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a
one of the small developing state in India there was scarcity of
water but
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water, but
one teacher has invented
an
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a
method to save water for whole the year which has been
great benefit
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a great benefit
for them. In
conclude
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concluding
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
want to reiterate that if we want to develop once
country it's
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country, it's
very important to give
job
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jobs
to skilled and knowledgeable
employer
from poor countries
then
giving to
rich countries
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a rich country's employer
rich country's employer
employer
without any skill and knowledge.
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