rich countries should aallow jobs for skilled and knowlegeable employers who are from poor coutries. Do you agree or disagree.

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Even after the decades of modernisation I can clearly say with credence, that in most of

the countries, rich

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the rich countries,

has been always rich and poor has been always poor, even after lots of great supports and changes by the government.Which in my opinion

job

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is the main cause of it, by

favering

promote over another

favouring

fathering

furthering

wealthy people with better

job

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without knowing their skills which

lands

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land

in leaving behind the poor people assuming them as lesser privilege.

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in my opinion

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belief

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believe

believed

that it's important for rich countries to give

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job

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jobs

to skilled and knowledgeable

employers

a worker who is hired to perform a job

employees

from poor countries, cause it may bring large scale of development which they never aspect.

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even if rich countries

has

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have

their own skilled and high knowledge

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employer but

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employer, but

they are not same as

skilled

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a skilled employer

employer

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from poor countries because

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this

plural of "this"

these

peoples

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people

are more hard working and loyal towards what they are doing with

perfect goal

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the perfect goal

in their mindset.

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bring

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brings

better environment and trust within workers.

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, the way the poor countries think can be very helpful and logic.

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, to improve

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country we have to able to think from both the

aspect

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aspects

of rich and poor

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therefore

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being from poor

countries these

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countries, these

employers know what is the weakness of the country and how to tackle the hardest problems due to their experience.

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likewise

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being

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one of the small developing state in India there was scarcity of

water but

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water, but

one teacher has invented

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method to save water for whole the year which has been

great benefit

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a great benefit

for them. In

conclude

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concluding

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refers to the speaker or writer

want to reiterate that if we want to develop once

country it's

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country, it's

very important to give

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job

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jobs

to skilled and knowledgeable

employer

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from poor countries

then

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giving to

rich countries

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a rich country's employer

rich country's employer

employer

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without any skill and knowledge.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

296 words

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rich countries should aallow jobs for skilled and knowlegeable employers who are from poor coutries. Do you agree or disagree.

Fully explain your ideas

Full-time university students spend a lot of time studying. Some say they should do other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that advertising is a major factor in driving consumer demand. Others believe that consumers are becoming more immune to advertising. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both vioews and give your opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion