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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications are having a significant impact on a nation’s traditional skills and ways of
life
. Some argue that
such
 impact is so extraordinary that it would make conventional skills and
life styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
 obsolete.
However
, I believe they would continue to thrive by providing alternatives to modern ways of
life
, and innovative ideas for modern technologies.
First
 of all, traditional skills and ways of
life
 are becoming an alternative solution to the problems caused by “
mainstreamed
the prevailing current of thought
mainstream
” ways of
life
 which are greatly influenced by modern technologies.
For instance
, a
cozy
enjoying or affording comforting warmth and shelter especially in a small space
cosy
 restaurant where traditional, home-brewed beer is served, offers another experience to people who are bored with branded beers that have the same
flavor
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavour
 and come out of mass production with new technologies. It is in
such
 a venue where traditional skills are preserved, people become relaxed and educated. Providing diversity and
thus
 enriching modern ways of
life
,
such
 traditional skills and ways of
life
 would continue to have their place.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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