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PROVISION OF HEALTH SERVICES SHOULD BE FREE OR THE RESPONSIBILITY OF THE GOVERNMENT? DISCUSS?

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Health
 services are important as diseases are increasing.It is argued that whether it should be free or it is the responsibility of the
government
. I think it is the duty of
government
 to take
care
 of their citizens.
This
 essay discusses regarding their role in the
health
 sector. To embark with, since citizens are paying huge taxes, it is the sole duty of
government
 to provide free medical facilities. The
government
 should reach every corner of the country to help people regarding
health
 issues.
For example
, polio vaccines should be provided free of cost to everyone, since it harms infants.
In addition
, as the population is increasing, more hospitals should be established to accommodate patients. If not, the
government
 should expand or upgrade their medical facilities in existing
health
care
 for instant treatment of patients. In fact, in India, underdeveloped hospitals fail to provide fast
care
, resulting in even worse condition.
Therefore
, a lot of lives can be saved, in case of emergencies.
Furthermore
, poor people, who cannot afford expensive treatment, should be covered under
government
care
. The
Government
 should launch different schemes to undertake underprivileged people to access
health
care
 services. To illustrate, free medical camps should be launched at every corner for general
health
 check.
Thus
, people can acknowledge it.
Moreover
, heavy penalty should be charged for those hospitals, who denies to treat poor ones for less price To conclude,
although
health
 services cannot be free as it costs a lot to maintain
this
 sector. The
Government
 should come forward to make enough budget towards
health
care
. So that
health
 is not being compromised due to lack of treatment
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