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Caring For Children is very important for our society. therefore all mothers and fathers should take childcare training course. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Parenting is a very difficult job and it is of utmost important to perform
this
 job assiduously. Since, children's are the future of a nation,
therefore
 people have
lot
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a lot
lots
 of aspirations
from
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for
 them. So, to make them a good human being it is very necessary to inculcate high moral values and ethics
at
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in
 their early age. As all of
this
 is a part of
child
care
, some people think that the
child
care
 training should be imperative for all mothers and fathers. In my opinion, I agree partially with
this
 notion. To embark on, nowadays nuclear families are more ubiquitous in our cities where both the parents are working.
Hence
, in
such
 families raising a
child
 is a very challenging task.
Hence
, in
such
cases both
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cases, both
 father and mother should be obliged to undergo
such
 training
as
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at
 any one of them can take
care
 single-handedly.
Secondly
,
this
 training
also
 helps parents to understand their
child
 properly, which
otherwise
 is not possible. Because, as these
type
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types
 of training are imparted by professionals, they educate people how to handle when a
child
 cries, what are the sundry reasons of crying and if a
child
 is crying for prolong time
,
Accept space
,
then
 contact a doctor. In case of joint families, there is a privilege that there are other members of
family
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the family
too that
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too, that
 help in taking a good
care
 of
child
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the child
children
a child
. In these families, the elders helps a lot in upbringing of
child
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children
the child
a child
. As elders are more experienced in
such
 activities, they teach plenty of things
to
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for
 the parents of
child
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children
the child
a child
 in terms of taking
care
 and supervision of
child
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children
the child
a child
. Above all, there help is free of cost as
child
 training people charge fees to train people. To
conlcude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
, I would like to reiterate my opinion that not all mothers and fathers should take
such
 training. It is only helpful for people living in
nuclear family
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nuclear families
a nuclear family
the nuclear family
 and there is no elder for guidance

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