The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates how many men and
women
students
in further
education is
studying full-time or part-time in Britain from periods 1970/71, 1980/81 and 1990/91. The numbers are measured in thousands.
Change the verb form
are
Overall
, there's an increased number of male and female full-time students
. There is also
a steady growth in women
studying part-time in further
education even surpassing the males by the year 1990/91, while
men students
had a decline in the year 1980/81.
In 1970/71 male part-time students
are more dominant than women
with 1 million students
. However
, by 1980/81 the male
Correct quantifier usage
number of male
part timers
decreased by almost 80%. And by the end of 1990/91 male part-timers were just over 800 thousand Add a hyphen
part-timers
while
women
have 1200 million enrollees thus
making the
female Correct article usage
apply
students
at the top spot of student part-timers.
The number of both men and women
in full-time education increased from 1970/71 to 1900/91, with a significant increased
in female full-time Replace the word
increase
students
from just about 100 thousand in 1970/71 to above 200 thousand in 1980/81.Submitted by plukjennyvy.vinoya on
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