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There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter • Describe the problems • Explain how these problems are affecting you and others • Suggest what could be done about it

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Dear Sir, I would like to bring your kind attention
towards
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 the problem I am facing with
the
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public transport. I travel to my office daily using
Bus
 number 45. Nowadays, the
bus
 driver does not stop the
bus
 on the desired stand because there are many students who use the same
bus
 to reach their college. There are many civilians waiting for the same
bus
 to reach
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their destinations on time but due to the abrupt behaviour of the
driver
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 we reach late.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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