Many people today are worried about young children using video games. What problems might these games cause for children and society as a whole? How could these problems be reduced?

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The almost universal availability of video games among children has presented us with a number of challenges and decisions, none of which are straightforward. I believe there are three main problems associated with these products, and
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three
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act of correcting an error or a fault or an evil
remedies
we can adopt. Perhaps the major problem we need to deal with is the level of violence found in these games. Many of them feature
aggresive
having or showing determination and energetic pursuit of your ends
aggressive
or warlike characters, ranging from soldiers to criminal and killers. A
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issue is the obsessive way that some children use the games-
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, preferring their computers to real friendships, making these children isolated and socially naive.
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, there are physical effects
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of
excessive gaming, including eye strain, insomnia and damage posture. Turning to
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a possible solution
, one key step would be to legislate
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stricter
to control the content of these games. They could
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, be
reviewved
look at again; examine again
reviewed
revived
relieved
by censors in the same way that films are

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • interpersonal skills
  • violent content
  • academic performance
  • social isolation
  • family dynamics
  • educational campaigns
  • parental controls
  • alternative activities
  • content ratings
  • cognition
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