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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some that choosing a
career
 early and sticking to it
,
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,
will likely result in a more satisfying work life as opposed to those who keep switching jobs. I totally agree that the earlier an individual is exposed to a
career
 path and continues practicing it the more likely he/she is going
t
in the direction of
to
 be fulfilled
career
 wise.
Firstly
, the reason people experience
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 in their
job
 is when they attain the peak of their
career
. If they are exposed in
time
 to the
job
this
 becomes easy,
as a result
 of the regular practice over a long
time
 which would result in perfection.
In other
words when
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words, when
 people keep doing the same thing
over
Suggestion
after
 a long
time
, it becomes a part of them.
For instance
, the 'Williams sisters' were taught lawn tennis from childhood by their father and they have grown to become one of the best female lawn tennis players ever.
However
, people who frequently change professions are less likely to have
job
 satisfaction because they wouldn'
t
 have had ample
time
 to be good at their work.
In other words
, due to the continuous switching of jobs they wouldn'
t
 have acquired the essential skill and tricks necessary to rise to the top of their profession.According to a research done by the Nigerian psychiatrist association
,
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,
it was realized that those who didn'
t
 have a regular
job
 were suffering more from depression as they were not contented with their current
job
 position. In conclusion, despite varying opinion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think regular practice and early exposure to a profession rather than frequent
job
 switch brings more
job
 satisfaction.
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