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Nowadays many people choose ready made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantage and disadvantage of such a choice?

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Introduction
At present where foods are readily made available, many people would rather opt for instant goods than preparing it themselves for certain reasons. Along with either choice are
also
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 a number advantages and disadvantages.
Body paragraph 1
To start, many individuals would prefer ready-made foods than cooking at home because of the lack of
time
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 to prepare it themselves. Purchasing pre-packed goods
undeniably saves
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undeniably save
 a lot of
time
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.
For instance
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, my cousin, who is a working student, buys herself canned goods that only requires to be prepared in just a couple of minutes. It does not require her to waste a lot of
time
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 to slice it or cook it, perhaps.
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, pre-packed foods are preferred by someone who is very conscious
to
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of
time
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.
Body paragraph 2
In addition
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, as the ready-made foods become
time
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-efficient, money
however
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 is wasted. When buying foods from shops and restaurants, the prices seemed to be a bit higher. One does not just pay for the ingredients
used but
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used, but
also
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 the
time
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 and effort allocated by the one who cooked. To illustrate, when I buy for a serving of pasta in a fast food, it would cost me more than twice the amount I could have just
spend
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spent
 when I buy scratch ingredients and cook it myself. Since the readily made available foods are much pricier compared to the price you have paid when you make yourself,
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 a few dollars would be wasted as well.
Conclusion
To put it in a nutshell, buying pre-packed meals do have an advantage and a disadvantage. While it does save a lot of
time
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 by quitting the process of preparing,
money
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money, however
however
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, is put to waste as
readymade
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ready made
 foods are much pricier. One has to weigh the benefits and drawbacks before deciding whether to just eat a home-cooked meal or not.

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