"Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the *effects* of this on individuals and on the society?"

Special family moments are fast diminishing. In recent times,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of people spend more
time
outside their homes and
this
can have some consequences.
This
essay will discuss why persons spend little moments with their families and
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
effects on individuals and the public.
Majority
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The majority
of workers attribute their busy schedules to workloads and struggle to meet deadlines
,
Accept space
,
to some extent
this
can be accepted considering
difficulties
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the difficulties
experienced in securing good jobs
thus
one tends to protect any available with all interest.
On the other
hand some
Accept comma addition
hand, some
do not value family ties
therefore
are indifferent about spending more
time
at home, in
such
scenarios you see individuals plan activities that would keep them preoccupied throughout the weekdays and weekends
also
.
Although
everyone is entitled to choice of living
,
Accept space
,
as to where to spend quality
time
at yet the consequences are enormous.
Firstly
the young ones raised in
such
homes
hardly know
Suggestion
hardly knows
the importance of Unity, they grow up accepting the norm that home is not really where the loved ones are
hence
the tendency to misplace priorities later on.
Secondly
the most important agent of socialization is considered to be the home
therefore
there are some values that family times teach,
such
as
;
Accept space
;
respect, mannerism, and lots more. Spending more
time
outside the homes limits the learnings and experiences which members of the family should have gotten
firsthand
Suggestion
first hand
from, and in my opinion once the right values are not inculcated the society at large suffers as we will have less emphatic humans to relate with. I
n conclusion everyo
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conclusion, everyone
ne should be intentional about creating quality
time
to spend with their families despite workplace factors and personal choices because the consequences that will arise by some choices they make now will be long lasting and of course disastrous
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