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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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In the jet set epoch of science and
technonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
, a colossal
upserge
a sudden forceful flow
upsurge
 has been witnessed in the case of imparting knowledge to each and every person through the access of internet.
Although
 with the help of computers and
cellphones
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cell phones
 most of the innovative ideology among people has enhanced to much extent which has both pros and cons. It is easy to see why I comprehend
this
 stance. The most prominent factor which contributes to scads of merits is the comfort level. As most of the individuals are surfing the internet to get
answer
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answers
of
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to
 many questions they face during their study and work schedule, even the access to it costs very less. Those who do not afford the expenses of education in schools or colleges can learn at home via media.
Moreover
, it would be beneficial for the development of the digital nation by acquiring the data and information in
the the
definite article
the
 form of pdf files and online notes.
Therefore
,
this
 way leads to make one or society more applicable for better career option.
This
 trend
also
 has some drawbacks which cannot be given a
nelson's
English admiral who defeated the French fleets of Napoleon but was mortally wounded at Trafalgar (1758-1805)
Nelsons
nelsons'
Nelsons'
 eye. The major one lies in the increase of health issues. If a person is getting any type of information by using smartphones, it would put an impact on the eyesight of an individual to much extent. Apart from
this
, it
subsequently
 results in the decline of employment rate of trainers or teachers because there might be no more role them for the same. So, it
put
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puts
drastic affect
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a drastic effect
drastic effect
 on the health and people's career. In conclusion, it is quite evident that providing education using technological gadgets has both positive and negative outcomes
on
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in
 the life of people.
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