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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The Graph provides
the
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information about
waste
 produced in
tonnes
 by three companies namely
Company
 A,
companu
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company
 B,
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and
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company
 C between the
period
 2000 and 2015.
overall
 from the
graph
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graph,
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it is clear that
 the sewage produced by
Company
 A and
Company
 B has been
decresed
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decreased
decreed
 by
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the
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end of the
period
in
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 contrast,
amount
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the amount
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 of
waste
 from
company
 c increased steadily. in the
year
 2000,
Company
 A marked to produce
highest
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the highest
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 amount of
waste
 but with every subsequent
year
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year,
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 it has shown a remarkable decrease in the quantity of
waste
 it produced from 12
tonnes
 a
year
 to 8
tonnes
 a
year
.In
contarory
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contrary
,
Company
 C produced
lowest
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the lowest
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 sewage of 3
tonnes
 at the start of the
period
 and constantly increased to 10
tonnes
 a
year
at the end
 of the
period
.
Company
 B
has
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produced approximately 8
tonnes
 of
waste
 a
year
 at the beginning of the
year
 and constantly increased to 10
tonnes
 in the
year
 2005 and
there after
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thereafter
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shown
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showed
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 a gradual decrease in
amount
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the amount
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 of
waste
 produced and settled at
3
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the 3
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tonnes
 mark by the end of the
period
.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, tonnes, company, period, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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