Some people think it is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information, do you agree or disagree?

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With the advancement in technology
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,
we have better
access
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to everything with the help of
internet
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However majority
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However, majority
of the people believe that it is of no use to invest funds in opening libraries because today everyone is certainly inclined towards technology and has
access
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.
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According to me libraries hold their own importance and fast
internet
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can never replace them.
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essay will discuss fourth points. In regard to the individuals
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,
the libraries are still the most peaceful and quiet place where
one
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can study without any disturbance.
Firstly
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a person has all the
access
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to the vast pool of knowledge through physical books available.
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a lot a
people
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person
prefer
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prefers
reading a book rather than having
access
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to it on the net. There are many of the manuscripts and books which are not even available on the
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internet but
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internet, but
one
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can definitely
access
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them in a local library.
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Secondly there
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Secondly, there
are many side effects of being on screen all the time. An individual can have
severe affect
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severe effects
severe effect
a severe effect
on his
eye sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
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.
For
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instance if
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instance, if
we are spending more than 1
hr
a period of time equal to 1/24th of a day
hour
her
hear
on screen without taking breaks it can lead to eye damage.
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Consequently
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Consequently, one
one
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will have to use specs
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.
Hence
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this
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can be prevented if we opt for using physical books sometimes. To conclude
,
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,
to invest in building libraries so that
public
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the public
can use is a good option as
one
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gets
break
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a break
from always using the
internet
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and it
also
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benefits them physically.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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