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1. Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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It is tough to enter
in
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into
university
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 for both underprivileged/unfortunate and privileged/fortunate. In my opinion, I
am agreed
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have agreed
agree
 with the statement because of the strict entrance conditions of many
world
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worlds
 well known universities.
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, the graduate record examination requirements of the world well known universities, students have to take GRE test and must have to achieve
minimum GRE score
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a minimum GRE score
the minimum GRE score
 in order to get
admission
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 in that universities if the students are
failed
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failing
 to success in getting required GRE scores, they will not be succeeded in
get
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getting
admission
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in
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into
 that
university
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 either they are rich or poor.
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, some universities have conditions
such
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 as no supplementary in the earlier examinations for students to enter into a particular discipline.
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, a student wants to take
admission
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 in the graduation programme in a particular
university
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, he should pass all the examinations without any supplementary up to the twelve grades in order to fill full the no supplementary requirements of that
university
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 without discriminating between underprivileged and privileged applicators.
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, every
university
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 has its own criteria to evaluate the student’s entrance into the particular disciplines. Some universities have compulsory professor recommendations for considering students for
admission
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 into particular subjects and without considering students financial status. A professor selects a student based on his capabilities
such
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 as educational achievements, sports, volunteer activities and research works done by the students.
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this
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This
 evaluation is unbiased and completely based on the student’s past performances without considering the students are fortunate or unfortunate. In conclusion, it is not easy for underprivileged and privileged students
to take
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take
admission
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 in
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university
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a university
 without fulfilling the
universities
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university
university's
 pre
admission
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 requirements.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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