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Some people say that artists such as painters, writers and musicians affect our life more than scientists. TO what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.

#people #artists #painters #writers #musicians #life #scientists
Yes, I do concur that the social persons affect our life more than the scientist.In my personal perspective, numerous factors like mostly people are adore of musicians
,
Accept space
,
writers and painters or they are frequently
talked
Suggestion
talkative
personalites
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
 on media and their live programmes on media. Well the most dominant and the prominent factor is"
there
of them or themselves
their
 presence in electronic media's programmes".People watch their programmes and now a days, they are better able to question them live. Take myself,
then
 I'm inspired of a
personality
Suggestion
person
 named"Qasim Ali Shah", a Writer and a motivational speaker.
Few months
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A few months
 ago I even don't know him
then
 he came to media and before long I started knowing him.So, that's all for being his social personality, I came to know him.
On the other hand
, Scientists are not
usuall
under normal conditions
usually
on
Suggestion
in
 the electronic media
therefore
, people even don't know them rather than some traditional scientists. Recapitulating
this
, I would say that people do follow artists
,
Accept space
,
writer or musicians for their being social
personalites
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
.

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