In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In today's world, a great deal of nations
are facing
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is facing
a big issue that youngsters tend to have poor lifestyle and consuming habits, which are different from the
generaions
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generations
of their parents or grandparents. Some people assert that
this
unhealthy tendency has had drawbacks to
children
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children's
child
child's
health. Personally, I entirely agree with
this
view, and believe that
this
alarming situation has come about for several reasons.
To begin
with, the eating
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
have changed nowadays, children no more eat fruits and vegetables as much as previous generations. Processed
food
and fast
food
become
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
dishes in
this
generation. Not only fast
food
concern that becomes a big issue in
children
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children's
child
health, but other sweet products
such
as chocolate, candy or cake
also
another concern for them. They can easily be addicted
with
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to
these kinds of
food
instead
of a healthy meal with fishes, vegetables and fruits...
This
is why there has been a huge amount of
childern
a young person of either sex
children
becoming obesity nowadays. Looking back to the previous generation, adults do care
abut
on the topic of
about
nutritional value
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the nutritional value
in each
dishes
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dish
. They are aware that poor nutrition can affect
theie
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the eye
the ie
health negatively.
Moreover
, the way of living and addiction to modern technology has created
huge effect
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a huge effect
the huge effect
on children. Technologies like
social network
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social networks
a social network
, video games have influenced children to spend
lot
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a lot
lots
of time
in in
to or toward the inside of
in
front of electronic devices. Because of these children are not engaged in physical activities and
thus
likely to develop eye problems and backache due to poor posture. But, when we look at the past, children were spending more time on sports and cultural activities like dancing, singing and playing which made them very fit and could get more involved with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
and society. All in all, though people develop the bad eating habits and poor lifestyle, Parents should take necessary measure to advise and encourage their children to participate in
out door
located, suited for, or taking place in the open air
outdoor
activities and eat healthy foods like fresh fruits and vegetables. Together we can make a better life.
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