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In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people hold the view that children have been suffering from contemporary consuming habits and lifestyles. Personally, I totally agree with
this
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 view for two reasons.
Firstly
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, children tend to eat out more regularly than enjoying proper homemade food. Indeed, what they consume out there are mostly
fastfood
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fast food
 and sweet products, which contain a high level of sugar
,
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oil and fat substances.
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, young generation these days are more likely to get involved in diabetes problem than those who have a former lifestyle.
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, most children are not encouraged to add vegetables and fruits to their diets - great sources of nutritions for their health. It is claimed that children are
familier
well known or easily recognized
familiar
 with eating junk foods
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, there is a sharp decline in
the number
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the amount
 of
time
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 students get involved in doing exercises. Schools have become obsessed with exams that limits the outdoor
time
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of
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for
 children to play with their peers.
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, most of children do not walk to school anymore,
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 they choose to travel by car to school, which make the problem get worse.
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 the
time
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 at school, a large number of children choose electronic devices as a tool
of
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for
 relaxation, while their father and mother spent
time
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outdoor
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outdoors
 playing sports with friends when they were at the same ages. In conclusion, present
childrens'
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Childrens'
children
 habit of food and lifestyle is less healthy than earlier generations.
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 can be explained by two
abovementioned
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above mentioned
 reasons.
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, children should be encouraged to take up sports and consume more healthy food to keep a good lifestyles
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