Your son is learning a second language at school, but he needs some extra lessons. Write a letter to a teacher asking for help. In your letter: 1. explain why your son needs help 2. ask the teacher about her teaching experience and methods 3. and suggest a possible schedule for the lessons. write 150 words

Dear
Ms.
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Sarah, I am writing
this
letter to request for you to give classes to my son
Ronit
for
French
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the French

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language, as he is finding it difficult to learn at school.
Ronit
has taken French as the
second
language
this
year in his school.
However
, he feels that
,
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the teacher in his class is going really fast with the lessons and
that is
why
,
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he is not able to understand and grasp well what is taught to him.
Hence
, I feel he needs some additional aid to learn well.
Although
a friend of mine briefly mentioned
about
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your work, I would request
to
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kindly enlighten me about your pattern of teaching and
also
since
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how long you have been training the children in
this
field. It is important, as I want to enrol
Ronit
with someone who can work well with him. If you have time
on
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every Saturday morning at 10.00a.m, we can keep a
two hour
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session, as
Ronit
also
has
holiday
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a holiday

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from school that day. He will be fresh early morning to learn better.
Also
, he will
then
have the rest of the day to rest. Awaiting your reply Yours Sincerely,
Mrs.
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