The maps show the village park 10 years ago and the village car park now.

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The two maps indicate several significant

transformation

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the village

park

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over a period of 10 years.

Overall

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, the

park

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has been modernized, there have been some new facilities added to the

area

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while

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some

space

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have been expanded noticeably. 10 years ago, the

park

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was undeveloped with unused spaces and

little

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few

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amenities. At present, the spare

area

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the

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proximity to the Central football pitch has been converted into a picnic

area

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. The pond close by has been widened and

evolve

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into a lake for boating. To the bottom right of the

park

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, the wooded region 10 years ago was chopped off to make way for the construction of a new Cafe and public toilets. Surrounding the Village

Park

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a brand-new path has been built specifically for cycling outside. There

have

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also

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been some

noticable

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noticeable

expansion

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within the

park

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. The football pitch

remain

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in the central

area

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though it has been extended. The car

park

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near the entrance which used to only accommodate 20 people now can take up 30 more.

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, the tennis court has been increased twice in size.

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Finally

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the children's play

area

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has been divided equally into a

children

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children's

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park

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and a children's soft play

area

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, though the size still

remain

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unchanged.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

208 words

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