Parents are delaying childbirth nowadays than in the older days. Why is this? Do the advantages of late childbirth outweigh the disadvantages?

In modern society childbirth is often delayed by parents.Some may argue that it is
harmful but
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harmful, but
in my opinion by doing
this
father and
mother
can focus on their career more. By
delying
cause to be slowed down or delayed
delaying
dealing
birth
Suggestion
the birth
of
child
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a child
children
the child
,
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,
there are
lot
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lots
of advantages which parents can get.
Firstly
, when respective parents
dely
every day; without missing a day
daily
dearly
birth
of their
child
,
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,
they get more time to do their job properly.When they have
responsibility
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the responsibility
of a
child
,
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,
they can not
propery
in the right manner
properly
proper
focus on their workplace.
As a result
they perform poorly in their jobs.Another reason benefit of
this
is by
delaing
cause to be slowed down or delayed
delaying
dealing
child
birth they
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birth, they
can reduce their cost because a
child
bring a lot of expense.So by delaying
childbirth parents
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childbirth, parents
can save more money.
However
,
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,
some people may believe that delaying
child
the parturition process in human beings; having a baby; the process of giving birth to a child
childbirth
birth
is harmful for the
mother
.By doing
this
a
mother
in
future
Suggestion
the future
may not able to give
birth
, as it can bring more complexity.
Moreover
, some
pepple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
argue that when parents take
child
early soon after their
marraige
the state of being a married couple voluntarily joined for life (or until divorce)
marriage
,
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,
it can make father and
mother
more responsive.When they have a
child
they act
kore
used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs
more
maturely and the relation between father and
mother
also
improves. In conclusion
,
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,
Although
delaying childbirth can bring some problem
,
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,
I think that it has more advantages than
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
disadvantages.

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