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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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It is undeniable that crimes have increased almost in every country around the globe, and mostly it’s prevalent in the young generation. There are many probable roots
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the crime rate
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 most of us are aware of.
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 of financial stability have been ticked as current global issues. With
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, crimes like burglary, selling of drugs and weapons, can easily be associated. It is no new thing that literacy and education shapes the personality of an individual, and
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 of these has led to many horrific crimes like rape and sexual assaults and human trafficking.
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 of law and capital punishment have raised the crime rate exponentially in many developing countries, as many criminals have no fear of
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the frightful outcome
 of the crimes they have committed. The effective solution list of these causes can efficiently bring down many crimes. The most obvious step would be strict government rules like capital punishment or no bail for criminals who have been charged for rapes, murders and assaults. Another answer to most of the unethical businesses that unemployed people are lured into, can be
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 loan by government to the people till they find a new work opportunity.
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, ethical and moral education should be implemented in every country from the very beginning of schooling, and every individual should instil moral values in daily routine. Precisely, there are many causes
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 of strict law,
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 and illiteracy but crimes can be eradicated if proper steps are taken by the government and every individual.
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