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With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days,
people
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's thoughts and
reviews
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 of products and services are available on the internet to help
others
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 when making a decision. Some
people
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 think
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 is a bad thing, I believe,
on the contrary
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, that it is a positive development
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 in
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 both views will be discussed. On the one hand, online opinions make
people
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 waste less time on trial and error. Obstetricians,
for example
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, get ranked by their patients
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therefore
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, a pregnant woman just checks online
,
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apply
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 and
choose
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chooses
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 where and by
who they
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whom she
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want
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 to be attended without having to go to different consults. The second positive point is that it can prevent
others
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 from making the same mistake, and
consequently
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, money will
also
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 be saved.
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, when ordering food
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 delivery, one can see ahead the
reviews
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 of
others
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, not only about the taste, but
also
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 about the quality-price ratio, the time it takes to arrive home and the packaging of the product.
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, there is no filter to these opinions, so anyone can comment on services and lie about them
, many
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. Many
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 companies write their own
reviews
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 and mislead their customers to increase
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sales. In like manner, many web pages have written or video testimonials
which
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, which
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 make
people
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 buy goods that do not work as they should.
Others
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, in like manner, write to harm their competence,
such
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 as some hotels that write bad comments to decrease the bookings of their nearby hostels and bed and breakfast inns. In conclusion,
whereas
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 many companies lie in their
reviews
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, one can usually
realize
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 when that happens and dismiss that opinion. I certainly think that online comments and rankings are a good thing because knowing in advance the public opinion on a product, service, restaurant
or
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, or
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 even doctors can make your choice less expensive, more accurate and less
time consuming
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time-consuming
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.

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content
Work on full ideas. Some parts are not fully clear or well shown. Expand each main idea with a simple reason.
content
Use fewer wrong facts. The part about obstetricians and hotels is odd. Use examples that fit the topic.
cohesion
Make your links clear. Use 'and', 'but', 'for example' to join ideas.
language
Check spelling and word choice. Fix mistakes that make you sound wrong.
structure
Make the conclusion rest strong. Say your view again and sum up the good and bad sides.
strength
You take a clear position and say why you think the online reviews are good.
strength
You show both sides, not just one view.
strength
You give some examples to back up your point.
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