Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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Nowadays, people are giving more focus on the development of their child. Some people think that children’s free time is spent by a performing educational

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which helps them in their creativity and mind growth. In my opinion, I agree with

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will helps in analytical and mental growth of the children.

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with, One of the important reason is that children were not having ability to understand which

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is good or bad for them so, if someone strictly monitor and guide them about the educational games

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it would be more beneficial.

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, the age from 10 to 15 of the children is the critical part in which time they have to learn a

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some moral values that longs for the entire life span of a person.

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play of a teacher, in that they were learning that how to behave in class and talk with the teacher.

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leisure

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one can learn something and they enjoy the

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, introducing games that need creativity and analytic thinking

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play vital role in the development of children. Even the near

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helps children to identify their skills and their interest in a particular, subject during the school time which helps in n

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the near future

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when they are in the universities.

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, parents know that their children having drawing skills, they send them in art class where they learn more and expand their skills, later on in

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the future

they may select that as their career as well. In conclusion, children can learn anything easily compare to any other age people. So, if we teach them good values,

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