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Popular hobbies and interest change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is true that people's hobbies and interests
change
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to
 latest trends and fashions. People are following these hobbies and interests for popularity, not for personal pleasure. To
certain extent
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a certain extent
, I agree that people
change
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 their hobbies and interests with their passion. On the one hand, many people
change
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 their hobbies for popularity purpose.
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, people follow and do activities to show that they exist and are up to date with
latest trends
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the latest trends
.
However
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, in reality they do not really have
passion
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a passion
 for these activities.
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, photography has become
popular activity
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a popular activity
 in India. Many people are following it. While some them are doing it for their passion and interest in the photography where as others are doing it to show that they are updated with the trend and to receive the attraction of people by showing the latest model of a camera.
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, other people start following latest hobbies and interest because of the fact that they like these new activities. These new hobbies might be the latest trend;
therefore
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, no one was doing
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 in the past.
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 to
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, people may find these activities interesting and might start getting passionate about it. In conclusion, is it fact that sometimes people
change
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certain extent
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a certain extent
, I agree that people
change
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 their hobbies due to the recent trend, but there are others who
change
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 their interest due to
they
objective case of they
them
 like the new activity. I personally believe that hobby is a personal matter and anyone should not follow what is popular in
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the public
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