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Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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In the contemporary era
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people are becoming more materialistic. They bought numerous things from big markets and large companies have big budgets. They can promote things and marketing in an easy
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 and all small companies are unable to complete. More and more people are always preferred to buy things from larger companies. I will discuss the problems and solutions in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with
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, large companies spend
huge amount
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huge amounts
a huge amount
 of money on advertisement and promotion.
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, people always prefer to large companies. They used numerous types of communication for attracting the individuals.
manytimes
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Many times
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 individuals buy unnecessary items.
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, if more people buy things from big companies,
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 small
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 will be vanished.
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, local people do not able to
fullfil
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 their basic needs.
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, large companies attract more customers. In
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demand for their products increase.
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, large companies gain more profits as compared to local
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there are several ways to encouraging more people to buy local products. Authorities should provide subsidies for local
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 people. In
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, they can promote things in
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an easy way
easy ways
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, government ought to arranged camps in which local people can learn how to sell things to the customers and how made products in good quality
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, they can make things in good quality and quantity.
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, people can attract more and can use only local products.
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, government should provide help to local companies because in
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they can advertise products on national or international levels so
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numerous masses encourage towards local products
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 To conclude, large companies spend lots of money for their promotion and marketing the products.
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, people are influenced and buy branded things. So
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local
business
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 will be destroyed.
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, some actions are required for promoting the local products because it is very essential for local people.

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