There are many different types of music today. Why do we need music? Is there traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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Music

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food

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the food

soul

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the soul

. It provides tired minds a healthy entertainment and help to release pressure of work and other social activities. If we look back at history,

man

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love

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loves

music

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and melody all the time. People were used to show their sentiment through

music

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in different circumstances like war and battles, happiness and wedding ceremonies, grief and sorrow etc.

Interesting thing

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The interesting thing

is that in all the regions like Asia, Gulf, Africa, Australia, America

music

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is admired equally. In short, it has

deep perpetual relationship

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a deep perpetual relationship

deep perpetual relationships

with

human being

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human beings

a human being

. There are several types of

music

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practiced and listened in the world. Communities have their own traditional or folk

music

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For

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example classical

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example, classical

raga is pure Indo-Pak

music

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type whereas pop

music

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is recognized as international

music

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. Some people believe that traditional

music

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is more important than international

music

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. They say that traditional

music

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has its roots in the culture and it represents the history, traditions and thoughts of a community.

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, Indian classical

music

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express

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expresses

their religion and it is considered as sacred as religion.

In contrast

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, international

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is only for entertainment. Traditional

music

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helps a

man

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to get

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get

connected with his cultural

heritage whereas

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heritage, whereas

international

music

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leads to globalization and

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finally one may

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finally, one may

lost

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lose

his cultural identity.

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, some people have

opposite point

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the opposite point

an opposite point

of view. They believe that international

music

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is as important as traditional is. By

this

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, one can get closer and familiar to other nations. He can enjoy

variety

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a variety

of musical instruments. More vocal options are there. They say that International

music

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presents emerging trends and thoughts.

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, as the

man

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get

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gets

civilized and

world

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the world

get

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gets

developed, need of

music

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also get

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also gets

has also got

changed for modern

man

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. The parameters for likeness keep on changing with

generations

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the generations

. And international

music

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is up to date with current needs. I

belief

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believe

that traditional

music

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is more important when compared to international

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point of view is stronger for me. Without a shadow of doubt, international

music

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has charm, but traditional

music

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has its own scenario. It is more important because it has historical and geographical associations with a culture. Cultures must be alive for new generations; people must be connected to traditional

music

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for getting culture alive.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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There are many different types of music today. Why do we need music? Is there traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Fully explain your ideas

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