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Teenagers should follow elders .They should challenge the thinking of elders. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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Some people are of mind that their elders are to be challenged while others think that they need to follow them
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 essay we shall look into both sides of
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an argument
the argument
 before forming an opinion. To start with parents
try
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tries
 to impose their thinking on children because they assume that they are completely responsible in grooming their
child
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's personality
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In
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process they
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process, they
 tend to give direction for each and every act of a
child
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. When the
child
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 enters into teenage those corrections, looks interference in
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child’s world
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a child’s world
the child’s world
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 disciplining their habits looks annoying. By and large,
lot
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a lot
lots
 of parents do not want
growing
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to grow
 up to involve in any pain
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disappointment or failure. They fail to understand that protecting
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child
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the child
 from
realities
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the realities
 of life takes away valuable learning opportunity. Teenagers must challenge their parents to be
independent adult
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an independent adult
independent adults
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 choice of specialization in university is as per parents
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nearly 90% of youth do not choose
there
of them or themselves
their
they're
 subject of interest. To be a parent, we need to become an adult. Who will teach us to be an adult? Our parents, teachers and our manager failed. But teenagers can do it by discussing their point of views with parents
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Moreover parents
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Moreover, parents
 need to pay attention while listening to them and add their point of view as a friend. All in all, parents need to keep doing the good stuff, even when they don’t like it.
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, whatever they do not want their children to
do they
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do, they
 should ensure they do not attempt to do it.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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