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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult
life
 brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. These are different perspectives towards
life
 and they are based on situations. Every
individuals
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individual
individual's
 situation and conditions will be different at different time periods. Certain people have
happiest
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happier
 times during the teenage years as they would have had a good financial
conditions
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condition
 and they felt less responsible for a lot of things, As their parents were
suuportive
furnishing support or assistance
supportive
 and they took
care
 of everything.
However
, there are some people who think their adult
life
 is
more happier
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happier
, as they might have gone through certain situations during their teenage
life
 when they were more responsible and had to take
care
 of their parents or had to support the family financially. Over the years once they get settled with a good job and are financially stable, they feel more happier even though they have greater responsibilities.
This
 can be because they are
sed
employed in accomplishing something
used
said
set
 to
of
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for
 handling responsibilities. In my opinion, teenage
life
 would be
more happier
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happier
 because there would be less responsibilities, but as we approach adulthood, we need to take
care
 of our parents, spouse, children and job. Even though certain people will have more things to take
care
 of during teenage
life but
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life, but
 the magnitude will be still less as compared to adult
life
. In the end, I would conclude that every person is different and every individual will have
different opinion
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different opinions
a different opinion
 about the most happiest time in their
life
. There could be people who
tell
express in words
say
 that they felt happiest in their old age.
Therefore
,
this
 topic is more subjective than objective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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