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Some people believe that we have too option these days. Do you agree or disgree?

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We are living in an era where the humankind
have reached
Suggestion
has reached
 the highest figures of population and the most advanced form of technology. We, as human beings, are encountering more and more options every day and we have a chance to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 our desires much more than before. But it doesn’t mean that we have all these options granted and they are serving all of us unconditionally. People living in
21st century
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the 21st century
 are experiencing very advanced access of anything they may want which was not even imaginable to any human being from previous centuries.
For instance
, we are now able to arrange one week travel to any place around the world without
need
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the need
 of exhausting our budget, whereas
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 for leisure was not even an option
fo
appropriate to; intended for
for
 the vast majority before. Another good example for
this
 would be
food
benefit
good
. Especially in big cities, we can enjoy international food right at the moment. In the past, only introducing
new type
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a new type
new types
 of spice to Europe from
east
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the east
 would be very big news that would occupy a chapter in a history
books
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book
.
On the other hand
, I think we have reached a peak where we can enjoy these range of options. I believe adding any more options will not satisfy our hunger due to our limits as a human beings.
For example
, an average person who enjoys movies would have to wait only movie that will reach to their town for a month previously. But in
this
 decade, thousands of new movies are being introduced to people around the world monthly, which is far beyond the limits that we can consider to watch. Overall,
As a result
 of growing industries and faster rhythm of daily life, we are indeed introduced much more options for every imaginable
aspects
Suggestion
aspect
 of our desires.
On the other hand
, having that much of options, doesn’t necessarily mean that we are capable to reach and own every possibility that we encounter as we have limited time and sources by nature.

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