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Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem.

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Social media has many positive uses
,
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,
it can give you news in a fast way,
also
 it can connect people
whos
of which person?
whose
who's
 living abroad, it can
also
 give you all
kind
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kinds
 of
informations
a message received and understood
information
, it has made the world smaller. Sometimes social media has negative uses
,
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,
like small children watching
aweful
exceptionally bad or displeasing
awful
 stuff
,
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,
kids should never know everything at a smaller age.
Also it
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Also, it
 can make people believe fake news
,
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,
because sometimes those news
are built
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is built
 on speculations.As well it can make everyone distracted from studying and completing their tasks. As a solution the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should limit the use of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 for like 50% and parents should
forbbid
command against
forbid
 their kids from spending more than an hour per day.
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