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some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. others, however believe that school is the place to learn this. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #member #society #school #place
nowadays
Suggestion
Nowadays
 schools are held responsible for teaching a lot of things to children.
some
Suggestion
Some
 people think
that is
 a good idea if children learn how to be
good member
Suggestion
a good member
good members
 of
society
 in
school
, I, among other people disagree.
because
Suggestion
Because
 the act of sociability must start much sooner than the
school
 age. Children start understanding good and bad at early childhood, when they are still too young to attend
school
. The teaching of how to be a good member of
society
 must start in
this
 period and parents should not delay their responsibility as their children's
first
 teachers.
Although
 sociability in
school
 age is
also
 mandatory, because
school
 is the very
first
 big
society
 kids
get
Suggestion
to get
 familiar with after family, and start to act
responsible
Suggestion
responsibly
 by obeying the rules, where the actual right and wrongs matters.
That is
 why some people believe schools should be responsible for teaching the importance and difference of being a good citizen or a bad one.
However
, if young boys and girls have not been familiar with the idea of good and bad in family, they would not act
responsible
Suggestion
responsibly
responsibilities
responsibility
 in the new
society
o
in the direction of
to
of
or
school
. In conclusion, I think kids should start learning about good and bad from their own parents in their early ages, while
this
 process has to extend in the
school
 ages.

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  • moral values
  • social norms
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