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Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. Blood sports should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern times, the subject of cruelty against animals has become a contentious issue. Helpless animals are pitted against each other, for the pleasure of humans.
Blood
 sports are inhumane and I agree it should be banned completely. ‘
Blood
’ in
blood
 sports does not come from the
blood
 of the animals, but refers to the
blood
 of royalty when it originated in the 16th century. As a sport for the royalty, the only ones allowed to practice, fox tossing competitions were famous. The foxes were put on a sling and shot out to the sky, with the highest ever recorded was 24 feet. Once the foxes landed, they were scared and attacked the legs and faces of the people throwing them. The cruel actions of tossing them in the air, landing in a heap on the hard ground caused physiological damage to the animal. These kinds of unkind sport were used as an entertainment at parties, especially with couples rivaling against each other. Another
blood
 sport which has been played for 300 years and is practiced in modern times is bullfighting. While illegal in almost all parts of the world, it is still practiced in Spain and Portugal. At the expense of helpless bulls, humans wager and cheer, hoping to make money by gambling. About 250,000 bulls are killed each year and many more injured in the ring. To summarize, the two examples show how gruesome
blood
 sports are and have been used for the pleasure of humans.
Such
 cruelty does not belong in civilized society and I hope all the efforts taking place to ban
such
 sports are successful.

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