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Money Can Make Life Easier And More Comfortable. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#money #life
Sadly it
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Sadly, it
 is the most important thing in life.I find it hard for a person to live with 0
income
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incomes
, because without it
your
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you're
 worth nothing, the more cash you have the more things
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 can get and do. They say money
doesnt
does not
doesn't
 bring happiness
,
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,
what a joke!
it
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It
 sure can if you spend it in the right. Nowadays
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 need
alot
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a lot
 of it, especially if you have a big family. Kids
demands
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has demanded
never stops
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to never stop
.You need to keep them updates with mobiles
,
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,
and all their gadgets. Can it make someone super greedy?
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 doubt! It depends on the character. Should you save some for dark days?
yes
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Yes
,
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,
of course
,
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,
you never know when the wheel changes In general
,
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,
it is earned. In rare cases money can be from your parents or a lottery game.
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