Money Can Make Life Easier And More Comfortable. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Sadly, it

is the most important thing in life.I find it hard for a person to live with 0

income

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incomes

, because without it

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you're

worth nothing, the more cash you have the more things

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you

can get and do. They say money

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does not

doesn't

bring happiness

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what a joke!

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sure can if you spend it in the right. Nowadays

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you

need

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a lot

of it, especially if you have a big family. Kids

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has demanded

never stops

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to never stop

.You need to keep them updates with mobiles

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and all their gadgets. Can it make someone super greedy?

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doubt! It depends on the character. Should you save some for dark days?

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of course

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you never know when the wheel changes In general

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it is earned. In rare cases money can be from your parents or a lottery game.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

129 words

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