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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts show the percentage breakdown of
government
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 spending across nine categories in 2010 and 2015. Over the five-year period, there were significant changes in
expenditure
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. In both years, the four largest
areas
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 of
government
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expenditure
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 education, healthcare, pensions, and defence, with education taking the largest share (24% in 2010 and 21% in 2015). The smallest
areas
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 of
expenditure
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 were transport, culture and leisure and "other". Interest
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 borrowing and spending on welfare lay in between. Interestingly, between 2010 and 2015, spending on all four of the largest
areas
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 had dropped, with the exception of pensions, which remained the same at 19%. Spending on transport and culture and leisure
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 fell significantly, with the transport budget declining by
two thirds
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, spending on welfare and interest on
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 borrowing rose markedly, with the latter doubling over the five-year period to 10%.
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, the charts indicate that the
government
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 has had to cut
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expenditure
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 in most
areas
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 in order to fund the cost of borrowing and welfare.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, expenditure, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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