In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Every country has some billionaires who earn a staggering
amount
of money. While some opine, it is beneficial for a county, others demand governmental intervention to limit the
renumeration
a numbered list
enumeration
people can earn.
However
, I
disfavored
the state of being out of favor
disfavoured
such
irrational paradigm, and people should be free to make money according to their skills and abilities. On the one hand, it is thought that a few wealthy people of a country can transfigure common people 's lives by investing smartly. Because renowned business tycoons or entrepreneurs are the individuals who earn
exorbitant
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an exorbitant amount
amount
of salaries compare
to
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with
wages a common man. These people, being business minded, can obviously
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
for the
walfare
governmental provision of economic assistance to persons in need
welfare
of local people, and they can
also
earn by their services.
For instance
, launching of Jio, a mobile network, by one of the wealthiest persons of India - Mr. Mukesh Ambani.
Services
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The services
of Jio are way cost-effective in terms of SMS, VOICE, and Internet packs. I short, it can be argued it was Mr. Ambani who brought digital revolution in India.
Such
services were extremely pricey in the past, but Mr. Ambani invested billions of dollars for
this
feat and now earning even more. A growing number of people,
on the other hand
, opine that government ought to take control of the wages people earn in different fields. They believe that by setting a certain limit in the pay an enormous
amount
of money can be saved which will be deposited in
exchequer
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the exchequer
, and can be used for people in
destination
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the destination
, unemployment and
unpreviledged
. To illustrate the point, most of doctors earn average ₹1 Lac, and ₹50000 is enough to suffice all basic needs,
also
they can enjoy many luxurious in ₹50000 monthly income. If government spends remaining ₹5000 to help augment salaries of people who work
hard yet they
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hard, yet they
earn less than they deserve.
Such
as, a farmer in an impecunious situation. I am of the opinion that, people should be free to earn as per their expertise, knowledge and capacities. Imposing any form of restrictions on earnings would be unfair and that may result
into
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in
discrimination and many
haphazards
dependent upon or characterized by chance
haphazard
. Salary limitations,
therefore
, would be an inappropriate initiative. In conclusion, some people
favor
promote over another
favour
progress
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the progress
of some people, who earn
uncomparatively
high salaries, because they can contribute
in
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to
country's welfare
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the country's welfare
, and others aspire of imposing governmental restrictions
in
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on
people's earnings as remaining
amount
can be saved to bridge gap between
thw
definite article
the
rich and the poor.
Nevertheless
, I believe, in democratic nation
every one
all people
everyone
is free to work and earn.

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