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In some countries most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantageous and disadvantages of renting.

#countries #people #rent #house
It's undoubtedly true
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,
 that in some countries people prefer to live in
rent
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a rent house
house
 and
this
 trend have been going popular in some countries rather than buying own houses. There are lots of reasons behind
this
.
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.
First
 of all
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,
 a huge number of people say that today it's too difficult to buy
own
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owner
 houses because of the inflation rate has been increased and they say that their salaries is not enough to buy houses
similarly
, in today's modern world
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,
 it's too difficult to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 basic amenities of life
therefore
,
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,
 they forcefully to do
this
. From my perspective
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,
 there are some advantages and disadvantages
such
 as
,
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,
 those people who live in
rent
house
 they face lots of trouble
.
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.
 When they live in
rent
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a rent house
house
 during they must have to follow of their
house
 owners which are mostly too hard.
Secondly
, if they broke
some thing
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something, then
something then
then
 they must to double pay fine.
Besides
, certain time
house
 owners try to increase
hig
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
high
rent
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rental
 fees.
In
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On
 the contrary
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,
 if they try to buy their
house
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house, then
then
 they certainly will not face these
problems
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problems, thus
thus
 their money will not spend more as that they spend on
rent
 houses.
In addition
, in own
house
every one
all people
everyone
 can comfortably and happily live. They can provide all things to their
children which
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children, which
 is impossible in
rent
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a rent house
house
. To summarise, own
house
have
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has
 lots of benefits rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
rent
 houses.
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