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Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Advertisement has changed over the
time remarkably
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time, remarkably
, nowadays,
sponsorship
 is a best option for companies targeting sports. Some argued that there are many benefits of advertising, while other people
think it has few
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think it has a few
 drawbacks. Both views are valid, in my opinion, the advantages outweigh than disadvantages.
Firstly
, because of
plethora
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the plethora
a plethora
 of people
see
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sees
 cricket matches and other sports, it becomes vital for companies to use
this
 mass
viewership
 as a potential buyer by advertising with the help of
sponsorship
.
Secondly
, consumerism is getting built by
such
viewership
. Companies are saving a lot by
sponsorship
; other ways of advertisements are not so profitable to them. On
contrary
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the contrary
, as there are other supporters of zero advertisements
such
 as top performers who does not need advertise to get fame and sales done, they dislike
this
 idea of
sponsorship
.
and
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And
this
 dichotomy is what brings creative notions to higher levels. Remember the way TATAs work, only mouth publicity. So
such
 ideas are engraved in the mind of people.
Such
 people are against the
sponsorship
to
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of
 sports and advertisements. In my opinion, both the sides are having their own
causes
an occurrence of something
cases
, I support the idea of
sponsorship
 with care of not advertising the negative stuff
such
 as alcohol and cigarette etc., which will lead to destroying the mind of
younger generation
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the younger generation
. In my opinion, both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that with a view to enhancing their friendly relations and to interchange companies’ ideas about products, they should finance sports to publicize themselves.

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