*Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social,and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?*

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Children
are the upcoming citizens as well as the future determiners of our economy.Nowadays Children's are facing extreme pressure in most aspects of life. In
this
essay we will discuss the reasons behind these pressures and the possible solutions to alleviate the mental dilemmas. In the present day world, Children's face more mental and physical torture from institutions. The academic curriculum is so vast that even the bag with books is heavier than the student. Daily homework and timetable for studies has left no or limited scope for spending time outdoors. Another major concern is the societal and commercial implications. Parents usually set a role model for their
child
and they expect them to become like that.
This
c
reate
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creates
a strain in their mind as it may not be the area of their interest.
F
inally they
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Finally, they
struggle to get along with their parents wish. Commercial pressure
also
adds the stress as children's try to adapt themselves to the global culture while parents who have known the world better and rely more on t
raditional methods struggle
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the traditional methods struggle
to hold their children's.
This
affects badly as usually children's get mentally disturbed when they can't compete with their peers. Parents are always the
first
and best teachers of a
child
. The major concerns will get resolved if children's find comfort in discussing their issues with parents.
Similarly
, a change in s
chool curriculum
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the school curriculum
should be made helping
child
to spend s
ometime
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some time
to identify their area of interest.Teachers should
also
promote healthier discussions in school. To sum up, it's true that children are facing pressures from academic, social and commercial perspectives while there are ways to minimize these concerns and bring up their confidence. The parents,
t
Accept space
,
eachers together with the society has a remarkable role in the upbringing of a
child
.
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