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In some countries most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages.

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Most people of developing countries prefer a rented accommodation
instead
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 of buying a new home of their own. Renting a
house
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 has benefits of flexibility and is an affordable
option
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 for middle class people, but there are
also
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 some drawbacks to be taken into account.
Firstly
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, people who live in a rented
house
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 always have an
option
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 to move to a new city or
house
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.
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, many people in metro cities have transferable jobs so renting a
house
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 seems the best possible
option
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 to them because it is not possible for many to buy a new
house
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 in every city.
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, every person cannot afford to buy a
house
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 of their choice as it requires to pay a huge amount to the builder so renting a
house
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 or apartment seems easy
option
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. To state an example, even a poor person can have one room to
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 and pay on the monthly basis.
On the other hand
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, living in a rented
house
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 does not give that liberty or sense of freedom. Many landlords put certain conditions for tenants and those limitations sometimes raise a feeling of dissatisfaction among family members.
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, in major cities, tenants are not allowed to make any hole in the walls and some owners even impose a condition of no noise after midnight. Another possible issue is increasing
rent
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 rates in most big cities. In these cities,
rent
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 has increased so much that almost half of an employee's income is spent in paying
rent
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. In conclusion, while having a rented home certainly has some benefits, it can
also
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 lead to dissatisfaction among
people
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the people
 or huge burden on the pocket of a poor person.

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