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Some film companies spend millions of dollar on the production of a single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie ? What factors contribute to the success of a movie ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#film #companies #millions #dollar #production #movie #money #factors #success
When we say
film
 the
first
 thing in our mind is Hollywood and expensive
film
 production. Every time when
new
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a new film
film
 is presented
one
 of
important information
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the important information
 about
movie
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the movie
a movie
 is how much it cost and the
secound
coming next after the first in position in space or time or degree or magnitude
second
one
 which actors have been acted. Of course, some actors are more expensive
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 others and it is important things for movies lovers. Some movies are popular just because of
actors
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the actors
. If public hear that Bred Pitt acted in some
film
 it is pretty sure that the
movie
 will be successful and expensive
also
. Does expensive
movie
 mean successful
movie
? I think it is not the rule. There are many films recorded in
one
 room and with just two actors and it had
strong influence
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a strong influence
 on public and got
award
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an award
the award
 on
film
 festivals. Sometimes, success is just because of
original
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the original story
story
 or because it is about
current topic
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current topics
a current topic
 in global society. The success of a
movie
depend
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depends
 on many factors. In my opinion
story
 and the way of
story telling
The act or practice of telling stories
storytelling
 is
rhe
definite article
the
 most important factor.
For example
, there are movies with
great idea
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a great idea
 and
story but
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story, but
 during the
movie
 people lose motivation to watch it. It happened that the end of
movie
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the movie
a movie
 is meaningless and people were disappointed. In that case, it looks like producer hurried to finish the
movie
. Movies based on true
story
 are interesting because
public
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the public
 have in mind that it really happened and it can increase art effect. New
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
film
 “Pihu” is
movie
 about
little girl
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a little girl
little girls
, 2 years old, which stayed alone at home with her dead mother. Public assessed
this
movie
 as the most stressful in modern society and it is recorded in
one
 apartment with two actors.
Also
, the little girl was not famous
actor but
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actor, but
 on the other
side it
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side, it
 was a big challenge to work with kid and gain sense of
true
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true stories
a true story
story
. People want to know details about life of famous persons. In that case, most of people
is interesting
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are interesting
 for movies about famous politicians, actors, singers, and so on. “Bohemian rhapsody” is
popular
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a popular movie
movie
 because it is
story
 about
interesting way
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the interesting way
an interesting way
 of living of Freddie Mercury. So, making
movie
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movies
a movie
 is really
art
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an art
 and it doesn’t depend just on money. It is wide
story
 about talent, originality and creativity.

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